(who I believe is putting up her hood?)
Yes, that is what she is doing.
In terms of the narrative, a husband/wife relationship doesn't come through, largely because the female looks noble whereas the male looks common. Colour scheme, sculpt, and the aforementioned difference in elevations all serve to separate the characters, rather than bring them together. The male needs to be more heroic if he is other than her servant.
I see what you mean here, that's a very good point.
It isn't clear who the horse belongs to, largely because there is no colour coordination between it and either of the figures. The male looks like he is leading the horse, but clearly he's not, since the reins are on the saddle horn rather than in his hand--a hand that is over-armed with a strung bow--and no obvious quiver.
Very true again!
So--a good starting attempt, but I would encourage you to think of the diorama in the same way as you would an individual model--compose it with a sense of the whole, rather than making it up of entirely independent components.
Thank you VERY much for all the tips Sorrow. That all is very helpful! Maybe sometime in the near future I will get a chance to make another scene.. but it's going to be a while before I can probably.
Thank you again for the super advice!
Chris
"We should have a trading contest! We see who can complete the most trades in a designated amount of-- oops, Porkuslime won before I finished the sentence." - extropymine